Renting something

2024-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jenna

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These days, renting and subscription has been the main consumption pattern. Renting something is the best option in that we can take off our hands about buying. When the burden of one item has been decreased, it is easy to promote consumptions to other parts. However, there are some disadvantages of renting. The items that I have rented won\'t be able to be my asset and the importance of management has increased until I return it.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Ms. [Name] [이름]! Indeed, renting is very favorable to us in many ways. However, we also have to consider the drawbacks, especially when we reach specific period in our lives. Thank you for doing your composition. ^^ Looking forward to the next one.
~Jenna

These days, renting and subscription has been the main consumption pattern.
>>These days, renting and subscriptions have become the main consumption patterns.
Renting something is the best option in that we can take off our hands about buying.
>>Renting allows us to avoid the burden of buying, making it the best option in many cases.
When the burden of one item has been decreased, it is easy to promote consumptions to other parts.
>>When the burden of owning a single item is lessened, it becomes easier to allocate resources for consumption in other aspects of life.
However, there are some disadvantages of renting.
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>>However, there are also some disadvantages to consider. 
The items that I have rented won\'t be able to be my asset and the importance of management has increased until I return it.
>>Rented items will never become my own assets, and I have the added responsibility of managing them carefully until they are returned.

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