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2014-11-07 · 첨삭 강사 Reina

학생이 쓴 원문

Tell me about your family. I have two children, a daughter and son. My daughter Yun-seo, at 12, like to make a miniature and raise a pet dog. She wants to be a fashion designer in the future but she is still a girl who concerns about her appearance. My son Yun-woo, at 8, likes to do a computer game. He is into a shooting game, Bubble fighter these days. I don’t care about him because he is recognizing the society or community through the game. So did I then. He is not only playing a game but also chatting with many gamers in the cyber space. He nearly speaks well like an adult. I’m very proud of him. My wife, EK, is a good wife and mother. She is cooking well, too. I’m happy to have dinner altogether without any trouble or problem. She makes it possible to stay home comfortably. We love each other and we are happy to be with.

강사 첨삭

Wow Mr. [이름]!^^

I think and feel that you are very proud of all the members of your family!^^ I\'m sure that they are all very proud of you too.^^
Your family is a good sight of love and happiness!^^
Enjoy your weekend!^^

Teacher Reina *,*

Tell me about your family.
I have two children, a daughter and son.
>>> I have two children, a daughter and a son.
My daughter Yun-seo, at 12, like to make a miniature and raise a pet dog.
>>> correct!^^
She wants to be a fashion designer in the future but she is still a girl who concerns about her appearance.

>>> She wants to be a fashion designer in the future but she is still a girl who is concern / conscious about her appearance.
My son Yun-woo, at 8, likes to do a computer game.
>>> My son Yun-woo, at 8, wants to play computer games.
He is into a shooting game, Bubble fighter these days.
>>> correct!^^
I don’t care about him because he is recognizing the society or community through the game. So did I then.
>>> I don\'t care about him because he is recognizing the society or community through the game and so do I when I was young.
He is not only playing a game but also chatting with many gamers in the cyber space. He nearly speaks well like an adult. I’m very proud of him.

>>> correct!^^
My wife, EK, is a good wife and mother. She is cooking well, too.
>>> correct!^^ She cooks well too.
I’m happy to have dinner altogether without any trouble or problem.
>>> I\'m happy to have dinner with my family without any trouble or problem.
She makes it possible to stay home comfortably.

>>> correct!^^
We love each other and we are happy to be with.
>>>  We love each other and we are happy to be together.

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