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Tell me about your favorite food.
I like having Doenjang-jjgae.
It is a Korean soybean paste stew.
Its ingredients are soybean paste, tofu, zucchini, and pepper to name a few.
Soybean paste makes it possible to cook the various foods like soybean noodles, beef soybean stew, soybean ramen.
I used to cook Soybean paste noodles for dinner last year. It was so good and My family loved it. I was very delightful at this sight to eat deliciously.
Describe your company
I’m working for CPM, Corning Precision Material.
We are producing the transparent special glass for LCD TV, smart phone and laptop.
Our headquarter is at the Corning city in USA. We are multinational corporate where Corning’s branches are in Taiwan, Japan, and China, etc.
We have 2 Plants in Asan, Korea and the number of our employees is about 3,000 persons. Our revenue comes to $2.0 billion. This figures is the highest of the any other corning companies.
We have good salary and well fare systems so that
강사 첨삭
Very well said Mr. [이름]! I think that I\'ve known you more from merely reading all your homework. Thank you for sharing in a detailed way. kkk
Teacher Reina *.*
Tell me about your favorite food.
I like having Doenjang-jjgae. It is a Korean soybean paste stew.
>>> correct!^^
It\'s ingredients are soybean paste, tofu, zucchini, and pepper to name a few.
>>> correct!^^
Soybean paste makes it possible to cook the various foods like soybean noodles, beef soybean stew, soybean ramen.
>>> correct!^^ (Just add \"and so on\" at the last part of your sentence. )
I used to cook Soybean paste noodles for dinner last year. It was so good and My family loved it. I was very delightful at this sight to eat deliciously.
>>> correct!^^
Describe your company
I’m working for CPM, Corning Precision Material.
>>> correct!^^
We are producing the transparent special glass for LCD TV, smart phone and laptop.
>>> correct!^^
Our headquarter is at the Corning city in USA.
>>>Our headquarter is at the corning city in the United States.
We are multinational corporate where Corning’s branches are in Taiwan, Japan, and China, etc.
>>> We are a multinational corporate company and our branches are in Taiwan, Japan, China and etc.
We have 2 Plants in Asan, Korea and the number of our employees is about 3,000 persons. Our revenue comes to $2.0 billion.
>>> correct!^^ (Just check : 3,000 people not persons^^)
This figures is the highest of the any other corning companies.
>>> This figure is the highest among other corning companies.
We have good salary and well fare systems so that
>>> We have a good salary and well fare system so that..... (incomplete)
Teacher Reina *.*
Tell me about your favorite food.
I like having Doenjang-jjgae. It is a Korean soybean paste stew.
>>> correct!^^
It\'s ingredients are soybean paste, tofu, zucchini, and pepper to name a few.
>>> correct!^^
Soybean paste makes it possible to cook the various foods like soybean noodles, beef soybean stew, soybean ramen.
>>> correct!^^ (Just add \"and so on\" at the last part of your sentence. )
I used to cook Soybean paste noodles for dinner last year. It was so good and My family loved it. I was very delightful at this sight to eat deliciously.
>>> correct!^^
Describe your company
I’m working for CPM, Corning Precision Material.
>>> correct!^^
We are producing the transparent special glass for LCD TV, smart phone and laptop.
>>> correct!^^
Our headquarter is at the Corning city in USA.
>>>Our headquarter is at the corning city in the United States.
We are multinational corporate where Corning’s branches are in Taiwan, Japan, and China, etc.
>>> We are a multinational corporate company and our branches are in Taiwan, Japan, China and etc.
We have 2 Plants in Asan, Korea and the number of our employees is about 3,000 persons. Our revenue comes to $2.0 billion.
>>> correct!^^ (Just check : 3,000 people not persons^^)
This figures is the highest of the any other corning companies.
>>> This figure is the highest among other corning companies.
We have good salary and well fare systems so that
>>> We have a good salary and well fare system so that..... (incomplete)
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