resilient
학생이 쓴 원문
According to recent surveys, the number of dropout students is increasing especially in high school.
The most common reason is maladjustment to school life.
Of course, there are many other reasons, foe example, bullying, mental depression, studying stress and anxiety of university entrance etc.
It\'s sad that these things are repeated as vicious cycle.
Most of parents are following other\'s choice with anxious, not pay attention to their children\'s abilities and mental health.
I believe that resilient power is one of the most important competencies in our children.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]!
Some parents push their children to study hard so that they can be the person their parents want them to be. I hope that they will be able to see this as early as now. Take care always!
Aki~
According to recent surveys, the number of dropout students is increasing especially in high school.
>>> Correct!
The most common reason is maladjustment to school life.
>>> Correct!
Of course, there are many other reasons, foe example, bullying, mental depression, studying stress and anxiety of university entrance etc.
>>> Of course, there are many other reasons, for example, bullying, mental depression, the stress in studying and anxiety about university entrance, etc.
It\'s sad that these things are repeated as vicious cycle.
>>> Correct!
Most of parents are following other\'s choice with anxious, not pay attention to their children\'s abilities and mental health.
>>> Most parents are anxiously following others\' choices without paying attention to their children\'s abilities and mental health.
I believe that resilient power is one of the most important competencies in our children.
>>I believe that being resilient is one of the most important characteristics our children must have..
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