responsibilities

2020-07-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

학생이 쓴 원문

The responsibility as a mother is enormous. But love is fearless, I feel like unknown power is being generated. There is always a thought that children should be raised mentally and physically wall. To do so, I have to wait patiently for a long time. Without love, I can`t stand it, I can`t wait. But I become a mother, I feel like love is set in a gene. I think it is a gift from God. I was always sick and there was not much I could do alone. Even after college, if I try to go to another city by bus, the whole family was in a states of emergency. Now I think about it, I have lived like a fool. Mom`s love makees me bear a lot of responsibility. .

강사 첨삭

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Here are your corrections:

The responsibility as a mother is enormous.
>> The responsibilities of a mother is enormous.

But love is fearless, I feel like unknown power is being generated.
>> But, love is fearless. I feel like an unknown power is being generated.

There is always a thought that children should be raised mentally and physically wall.
>> ..well.

To do so, I have to wait patiently for a long time.
>> CORRECT

Without love, I can`t stand it, I can`t wait.
>> CORRECT

But I become a mother, I feel like love is set in a gene.
>> But, I became a mother and I feel like it set in our genes.

I think it is a gift from God.
>> CORRECT

I was always sick and there was not much I could do alone.
>> CORRECT

Even after college, if I try to go to another city by bus, the whole family was in a states of emergency.
>> ..state..

Now I think about it, I have lived like a fool.
>> Now, when I think about it, it\'s like I lived like a fool.

Mom`s love makees me bear a lot of responsibility.
>> A mother\'s love make me bear a lot of responsibility.

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