Responsibility

2019-07-10 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

Sense of responsibility is the most important for inner beauty. When I work in company and have to finish a project, I should have responsibility. If I’m a responsible person among co-workers, we can execute something successfully because they trust me. Relationship of family also require the personal trait because there are duties of family member. If they trust each other, the relationship will be stong.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for sharing your opinions [이름]. A lot people always consider the outer beauty at first.

But we always realize how important inner beauty is. ^^

~~Teacher May~~

Sense of responsibility is the most important for inner beauty.

>> CORRECT
 When I work in company and have to finish a project, I should have responsibility.

>> When I have to work in the company and finish a project, I should have a sense of responsibility.
 If I’m a responsible person among co-workers, we can execute something successfully because they trust me.

>>  If I’m a responsible person among co-workers, I can execute everything successfully because they trust me.
 Relationship of family also require the personal trait because there are duties of family member.

>> Relationship with family also requires a personal trait because each family member has duties.

If they trust each other, the relationship will be stong.

>> If they trust each other, the relationship will be stronger.

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