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I went VIPS last Sunday, VIPS is one of Korean franchise restaurant.
>>I went to VIPS last Sunday, VIPS is a Korean franchise restaurant.
>>I went to VIPS last Sunday, VIPS is one of the franchise restaurants in Korea.
It spelling is V, I, P, s, so it means VIP’s restaurant.
>>The spelling is V, I, P, s, so it means VIP\'s restaurant.
Actually there’s kind of steak and salad bar it depend on different season or their specific event like Spanish table.
>>Actually, there are many kinds of steak and a salad bar which they offer depending on the season or the event like Spanish table.
Last Sunday, I was gathering together with my university’s friends.
>>Last Sunday, I gathered together with my university friends.
We went there because one of my friends working for VIPS, so she has a discount card since we usually go there when we get together.
>>We went there because one of my friends is working at VIPS, so we usually gather there because she has a discount card.
After the discount, the price is quiet reasonable, actually.
>>Actually the price is quite reasonable after the discount.
And the atmosphere was cool with fresh salad bar, and rhythmical music.
>>The atmosphere is cool because of the fresh salad bar and rhythmical music.
Plus, Service was friendly, helpful, and attentive without being pretentious.
>>Plus the service crews are was friendly, helpful, and attentive without being pretentious.
I was really satisfied with this place, so I’d definitely visit there again in the near future.
>>I was really satisfied with the place so, I will definitely visit there again in the near future.
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