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Hello there!
Thanks for sending this composition.
It\'s good that you have that craving to study more.
Learning English creates a lot of possibilities for you.
Continue reaching your dream!^^
~~T. Isabel^^
I\'m graduated in 2011, I\'ve gained a lot of social experience through part-time jobs.
>>I graduated in 2011 and I have gained a lot of experiences from my part -time jobs.
Also, I did work at my father\'s company for social experience and saving.
>>Also, I did work at my father\'s company as a social experience and to save money.
but, I think that greed of study is really endless.
>>But I think that greed to learn a lot/more is really endless.
At last, I think the Foreign Carriers. and I need to study English.
>>At last, I thought of working in Foreign Carriers so I really need to study English.
So, I decide to go to aborad study. because English is absolutely necessary for that job.
>>So I decided to go abroad to study because English is absolutely necessary for that job.
Exciting and it seems there are a lot of possibilities.
>>It\'s exciting and there are a lot of possibilities _.
I decided to go England. The reason why I chose England was I guess there is a many good thing for me.
>>I decided to go to England. The reason that I chose England is that I guess there are many good things for me there.
Also, it could be advantage when come back Korea and to get a job.
>>Also, it could be an advantage when I come back to Korea and get a job.^^
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