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3. Where do you see yourself in 5 years?
Sorry Faye. I had misunderstand about this Question. I thought that question meaning is what did you had during 5 year before applying this position. But I realized that I was so stupid. I had read more concentrate on that sentence. That mean was after 5 years what do you do ? So I wrote a new article
 I will be there where can I work for hardly. also had a lot of knowledge and skills to work in a multinational corporation as internal auditor. No problem any place at any country. If I were work in Mars also Good. So may be have a some possibility lived in Mars ^^ At that time I will manage staff in friendly condition. Always talk with our staff to work more efficiently and relax(happy? ) them when they felt depress.
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Here are my corrections.
3. Where do you see yourself in 5 years?
>>> Correct. Sorry Faye. I had misunderstand about this Question.
>>> I am sorry Faye I had misunderstood this question.
I thought that question meaning is what did you had during 5 year before applying this position.
>>> I thought that the question was, What did I have 5 years ago before I applied to this position?
But I realized that I was so stupid.
>>> Correct.
>>> But I realized that I was wrong. (Better)
I had read more concentrate on that sentence.
>>> I had concentrated on reading that sentence.
That mean was after 5 years what do you do ?
>>> And the meaning was that after 5 years from now where would I be.
So I wrote a new article
>>>Correct.  I will be there where can I work for hardly. also had a lot of knowledge and skills to work in a multinational corporation as internal auditor.
>>>I will still be in the Company working hard. Maybe by that time I would have gained a lot of knowledge and skills as an internal auditor.
No problem any place at any country.
>>>I will have no trouble when I am given business trips.
If I were work in Mars also Good.
>>>Even if I have to travel to Mars in the future for maybe future businesses.
So may be have a some possibility lived in Mars
>>> If ever there will be life in Mars.
^^ At that time I will manage staff in friendly condition.
>>> During that time I would be managing my staff in a friendly way.
Always talk with our staff to work more efficiently and relax(happy? ) them when they felt depress.
>>> I would always talk to my staff so that we have a good working environment.
and relax (happy?) them when they feel depress.
>>> And I would try to help them with their problems when ever I can.
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