retirement

2023-11-06 · 첨삭 강사 Hanna

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It is not a good thing that human lifespan become longer than ealier. Longer lifespan causes many imbalances in our life. As we get older, we face financial and health difficuities in reality. We know that we should prepare for our old age, but we don\'t have so much afford it. If we are healthy, we should do any kinds of work after retirement even social services as we we can do. .

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Thank you for your homework, [이름]!

You\'re doing great!

-Hanna ^^

It is not a good thing that human lifespan become longer than ealier.

>>It is not a good thing that human lifespans are becoming longer than before. 
Longer lifespan causes many imbalances in our life.

>>Correct.
As we get older, we face financial and health difficuities in reality.

>>Correct.
We know that we should prepare for our old age, but we don\'t have so much afford it.

>>While we understand the importance of preparing for old age, affording it can be a challenge.
If we are healthy, we should do any kinds of work after retirement even social services as we we can do. .

>>If we are healthy, we should consider engaging in various kinds of work after retirement, including social services, to the best of our abilities.


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