retirement
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I think retirement is the end of invariable routines and new opportunities to do various things. If I retire, I will travel our country and other countries. If I retire, I will sometimes stay in the library to read. If I retire, I\'ll often climb with my husband or friends. If I retire and need to get a job, I will try to start an employee not an employer.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
It\'s very interesting how you have a lot of things you can do during your retirement. I bet you are excited to retire as well, but at the same time, you might be worried about the tasks you will be leaving behind.
- T. Caitlyn
I think retirement is the end of invariable routines and new opportunities to do various things.
>> CORRECT
If I retire, I will travel our country and other countries.
>> If I retire, I will travel around our country and to other countries.
If I retire, I will sometimes stay in the library to read.
>> CORRECT
If I retire, I\'ll often climb with my husband or friends.
>> If I retire, I\'ll often go climbing with my husband or friends.
If I retire and need to get a job, I will try to start an employee not an employer.
>> If I retire and need to get a job, I will try to become an employee, not an employer.
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