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Good afternoon.
Did you have a delicious meal?
I'm just fine but I feel a little tired.
I wanna talk about the reason I feel tired this morning.
Before talking about that, may I heard from you what to do during your pastime after working yesterday?
During the last night, I could not keep a sweet sleep because of two reasons.
One reason is airconditioner.
Yesterday night, it’s too hot to sleep so our family set up airconditioner in a low temperature. After setting, we can start to sleep safely under the cool air.
But after sometime, I felt very cold because of airconditioner so I get up to control temperature but I counldn’t find airconditioner’s remote control.
Other than me, my family still splet well regardless of low temperature. For that reason, I try to find a Blanket instead of finding remote control.
Finally I fell a sleep again with a blanket in spite of summer.
About the rest I said you today, I wrote next page becuase of text allownace size.
강사 첨삭
Well I\'d rather tell you in class what I do during my free time :) I think that would be far more exciting. Don\'t worry, the summer season will soon pass. You just need to endure a little bit more. :)
T. Kelly
Good afternoon.
>>Correct!Did you have a delicious meal?>>Correct!I\'m just fine but I feel a little tired.
>>Correct!I wanna talk about the reason I feel tired this morning.
>>Correct!Before talking about that, may I heard from you what to do during your pastime after working yesterday?>>Before talking about that, can you tell me what you did after work yesterday?During the last night, I could not keep a sweet sleep because of two reasons.>>Last night, I couldn\'t get a good sleep because of two reasons.One reason is airconditioner.
>>One reason is the air conditioner.Yesterday night, it’s too hot to sleep so our family set up airconditioner in a low temperature.
>>Yesterday night, it was too hot to sleep so our family set the air conditioner up to low temperature.
After setting, we can start to sleep safely under the cool air.
>>After that, we went to bed under the cool air.But after sometime, I felt very cold because of airconditioner so I get up to control temperature but I counldn’t find airconditioner’s remote control. >>But after sometime, I felt very cold because of the air conditioner so I got up to control the temperature but I couldn\'t find the air conditioner\'s remote control.
Other than me, my family still splet well regardless of low temperature.
>>Other than me, my family slept well throughout the night.
For that reason, I try to find a Blanket instead of finding remote control.
>>For that reason, I tried to find a blanket instead of finding the remote control.Finally I fell a sleep again with a blanket in spite of summer.>>Finally I fell asleep again with a blanket inspite of the season.About the rest I said you today, I wrote next page becuase of text allownace size.
>>I told you the rest of the story awhile ago. I wrote on the next page because of the text allowance size.
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