Riot in the United States of America (2)

2020-06-03 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

학생이 쓴 원문

The policy who is white pushed his neck for 9 minutes even if he begged his life. \" I can\'t breath\" The series of incidents makes the protests which have continued for 9 days. The protests, not all but most, have progressed aggressive, violent, and wrong way. From what I know, they did this protest because of nowadays incidents. They have suffered from racism for a long time. Especially, after electing Trump, racism has spread more because Trump takes advantage of racism politically. In particular, he has used racism more to avoid the responsibility of the coronavirus. Unfortunately, most people who have low income, temporary jobs, and don\'t have insurance are also African-Americans. I don\'t want to make prejudice, but it is true statistically. Because of racism, they couldn\'t get a good education. So many African-American couldn\'t get much money. They suffered from poverty. And this situation has repeated. It is like the problem of \"Egg or Chicken\"

강사 첨삭

Hello there, [이름]. ^^
This situation really is sad. I hope the government will do something about it. 
Please take care and see you in class! :)

- T. Rina


1. The policy who is white pushed his neck for 9 minutes even if he begged his life. 
>> The police officer who is white knelt on his neck for 9 minutes even if he begged for his life.

2. \" I can\'t breath\" 
>> I can\'t breathe.

3. The series of incidents makes the protests which have continued for 9 days. 
>> The series of incidents make the protests which have continued for 9 days. 

4. The protests, not all but most, have progressed aggressive, violent, and wrong way. 
>> CORRECT!

5. From what I know, they did this protest because of nowadays incidents. 
>> From what I know, they did this protest because of incidents nowadays

6. They have suffered from racism for a long time. 
>> CORRECT!

7. Especially, after electing Trump, racism has spread more because Trump takes advantage of racism politically. 
>> CORRECT!

8. In particular, he has used racism more to avoid the responsibility of the coronavirus. 
>> CORRECT!

9. Unfortunately, most people who have low income, temporary jobs, and don\'t have insurance are also African-Americans.
>> CORRECT!

10. I don\'t want to make prejudice, but it is true statistically. 
>> CORRECT!

11. Because of racism, they couldn\'t get a good education. \'
>> CORRECT!

12. So many African-American couldn\'t get much money. 
>> So many African-Americans couldn\'t get much money. 

13. They suffered from poverty. 
>> CORRECT!

14. And this situation has repeated. 
>> CORRECT!

15. It is like the problem of \"Egg or Chicken\"
>> CORRECT!

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