role as a member of society
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that the elder people should not be superfluous at home or society.
When humans do something in our life, we can have a sense of presence.
Only enjoying hobbies and killing the time are not good between ourselves and society.
It is not mean very big thing and don\'t need special abilities.
To say my opinion is picking up trash , volunteering and caring kids and so on
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]!
I got your point, and I agree that elderly people who get cash support from the government should also do something as a form of their appreciation and gratitude. Unless they are invalid, then that would be an exemption.
Aki~
I think that the elder people should not be superfluous at home or society.
>>>I think that the elderly people should not be superfluous at home or society.
When humans do something in our life, we can have a sense of presence.
>>> When humans do something in our life, we can have a sense of presence.
Only enjoying hobbies and killing the time are not good between ourselves and society.
>>> CORRECT!
It is not mean very big thing and don\'t need special abilities.
>>> It does not mean a very big thing and doesn\'t need special abilities.
To say my opinion is picking up trash , volunteering and caring kids and so on
>>> CORRECT!
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