Role of music

2020-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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I think that music can influence people\'s living. Long times ago, famous singer sang a \"come back home\". As a result, many runaway teenager came back home. So music can be beneficial to people\'s living. While listening music, I can relieve stress and have a positive thinking.

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I think that music can influence people\'s living.
>> I think music can influence people\'s way of thinking. Research shows the benefits of music therapy for various mental health conditions, including depression and trauma, just to name a few. Music acts as a medium for processing emotions, trauma, and grief, but music can also be utilized as a regulating or calming agent for anxiety or stress. 

 Long times ago, famous singer sang a \"come back home\". 
>> Years ago, a famous Korean singer released a song titled \"Come Back Home\". 

As a result, many runaway teenager came back home. 
>> As a result, many teenage runaways went back home. 

So music can be beneficial to people\'s living.
>> So music can be beneficial to people\'s life.

While listening music, I can relieve stress and have a positive thinking.
>> While listening to music, I can relieve my stress and have a positive mind.

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