Rollplay-1. smartphone that you want to purchase 2.problem 3. problems after purchasing

2020-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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1. Hello. Is this the Samsung Electronics store? I am calling to get some information on the new Galluxi Z flip. I am really looking forward to this smartphone being released. I wonder if I could reserve this smartphone in advance. When will I be able to purchase one? How much will it cost? Are there any discounts available for workers? Do you have another model you would like to recommend? 2. Hello. I hope you remember me. I am calling to report a problem with my purchase. I bought a new smartphone at your store an hour ago. Smartphone heats up very quickly. I only talk about 5 minutes! I think it is defective. What am i supposed to do? I don\'t know what to do. I wonder if I could exchange it for a new one. If that is not allowed, can I get a refund? I would like to return it and get my money. What do you think?

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You did an awesome job [이름]! Please keep in mind all the corrections I made below. ^^
-Teacher Elise


Hello. Is this the Samsung Electronics store? I am calling to get some information on the new Galaxy Z flip.
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I am really looking forward to this smartphone being released.
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I wonder if I could reserve this smartphone in advance.
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When will I be able to purchase one?
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How much will it cost? Are there any discounts available for workers?
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Do you have another model you would like to recommend?
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Hello. I hope you remember me. I am calling to report a problem with my purchase.
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I bought a new smartphone at your store an hour ago. Smartphone heats up very quickly. I only talk about 5 minutes!
>> I bought a new smartphone at your store an hour ago. It was heating up very quickly. I only used it for about 5 minutes. 
I think it is defective. What am I supposed to do? I don\'t know what to do. I wonder if I could exchange it for a new one.
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If that is not allowed, can I get a refund? I would like to return it and get my money. What do you think?
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