Royal Family
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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on royal families in modern times?
1st, I don\'t like social status discriminations.
2cd, I don\'t know many about modern times.
3rd, I think that royal families in modern times were felt so good.
4th, But I don\'t like social status discriminations.
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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on royal families in modern times?
1st, I don\'t like social status discriminations.
>> 1st, I don\'t like social status discrimination. [Note that in formal writing, it\'s better to write the full word \"first\".]
>> OR: First, I don\'t like discrimination caused by social status differences.
2cd, I don\'t know many about modern times.
>> 2nd, I don\'t know much about royalties in modern times. [Mind your spelling of the word \"2nd\".]
>> Second, I don\'t know much about royal families in modern times.
3rd, I think that royal families in modern times were felt so good.
>> Third, I think that being a member of a royal family in modern times were felt so good.
4th, But I don\'t like social status discriminations.
>> Fourth, I\'d like to emphasize my 1st point which is, I don\'t like social status discrimination.
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