Rules&Policies

2021-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Theme: [ESSAY] If you could, how would you want to change the rules or policies at your school? I would change the rule about school president. In my school, students can become a nominee when they are in 5th or 6th grade. So I want to change it like this: All students(1st~6th grade)can become a nominee of school president! I want to change the rule about school president!

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Here\'s your edited composition, Clair! 
Thanks for sending it! 

On a different note, all the best on your election day. I\'ll always be one of your cheerleaders!

Cheers,
Jean~~


Theme: [ESSAY] If you could, how would you want to change the rules or policies at your school?
I would change the rule about school president. >> I would change the rule about the selection of a school president. In my school, students can become a nominee when they are in 5th or 6th grade. >> In my school, a student can become a nominee when they are in 5th or 6th grade. So I want to change it like this: All students(1st~6th grade)can become a nominee of school president! >> All students regardless of their grade level can become a school president nominee. I want to change the rule about school president! >> Therefore, I want to change the requirements for the school president.

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