Run my own business
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Actually, I'm always thinking about what to do if I resign or face the situation where getting employeed is no more a valid option to make a living for me. If I were given an opportunity to start off my own business, I would like to run the automobile service parts business. In Korea, as the number of imported vehicles continues to rise by almost 15% year on year, demand for service parts will increase, but currently supply is not enough to meet demand. Moreover, the most common and major complaints from import vehicles customers are the high parts price and the long delivery time. So, if I can supply parts much faster and at an affordable price, I believe I can win the completion. The downsides of the business are that it requires quite a large amount of initial investment and account receivable management will be a challenge because sales will take place mostly on credit due to the market practice. The next difficulty is how to secure regular customers.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon Sir [이름]^^
Wow! I am sure that if you will be able to run your own business, it will be really successful.
You know a lot of things about vehicles so it will be an advantage that you will be able to satisfy the demands of the customers.
I hope that someday, you will have your own business.
It is really important to consider a lot of things before starting your own business. You are a strong person so I believe that you can do it!
See you in class! Have a nice day!
Teacher Nina
Actually, I\'m always thinking about what to do if I resign or face the situation where getting employeed is no more a valid option to make a living for me.
>> Actually, I\'m always thinking about what to do if I resign or face the situation where getting employed is not anymore a valid option for me to make a living.
>> OR: Actually, I\'m always thinking about what to do if I resign or face the situation wherein I will be unemployed.
If I were given an opportunity to start off my own business, I would like to run the automobile service parts business.
>> If I were given the opportunity to start my own business, I would like to run an automobile service center.
>> OR: If I were given an opportunity to run my own business, I would like to run an automobile service parts center..
In Korea, as the number of imported vehicles continues to rise by almost 15% year on year, demand for service parts will increase, but currently supply is not enough to meet demand.
>> In Korea, as the number of imported vehicles continues to rise by almost 15% every year, the demand for service parts also increase, but the current supply is not enough to meet demand.
Moreover, the most common and major complaints from import vehicles customers are the high parts price and the long delivery time.
>> Moreover, the most common and major complaints from import vehicle customers are the expensive parts and the long duration of the delivery.
>> OR: Moreover, the most common and major complaints from import vehicle customers are the expensive parts and the delivery time.
So, if I can supply parts much faster and at an affordable price, I believe I can win the completion.
>> Correct! (Spelling check: competition ^^)
The downsides of the business are that it requires quite a large amount of initial investment and account receivable management will be a challenge because sales will take place mostly on credit due to the market practice.
>> The downsides of the business are that it requires a quite large amount of initial investment and account receivabel management will be a challenge because sales will take place mostly on credit due to the market practice.
The next difficulty is how to secure regular customers.
>> Correct!
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