S-F-C-H

2012-05-18 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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These days,I raises two pets. These are fish and a craw. They are very different. Fish-I have a 12 fish. But one of my fish is die. And now I have a 11 fish. And they are small maybe 2cm. But they are veyr beautiful. Craw-I have a just one craw. It is very strong. And it is long and big about 9 or 10cm. I like pets and i love it. SO i wanted a dog,cat and some other pets. Anyway,i love my pets very much sometimes i forget their food. I sorry my pets!!!!!!!!!! How about you teacher?

강사 첨삭

Hi Justin! Thanks for writing a composition today. Sorry to hear about your dead fish. At least you still have 11 of them. ^^ I don\'t like taking care of pets because I\'m too busy. I don\'t like cleaning after them or feeding them too. Haha. I guess I\'m not fit to be a pet owner. Have a wonderful weekend! CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ These days,I raises two pets. >> These days I\'m raising two pets.These are fish and a craw. >> I\'m raising a fish and a crow.They are very different.>> CORRECTFish-I have a 12 fish. >> I have 12 fish.But one of my fish is die. >> But one of my fish died.And now I have a 11 fish. >> Now I only have 11 fish.And they are small maybe 2cm. >> They are still small, maybe around 2 cm.But they are veyr beautiful. >> CORRECT *veryCraw-I have a just one craw. >> I only have one crow.It is very strong. >> CORRECTAnd it is long and big about 9 or 10cm. >> CORRECT OR >> It is long and big, about 9 or 10 cm.I like pets and i love it. >> I like pets. OR >> I love pets.SO i wanted a dog,cat and some other pets. >> So I want to have other pets like cats and dogs.Anyway,i love my pets very much sometimes i forget their food. >> Anyway, I love my pets very much but sometimes I forget to give them food.I sorry my pets!!!!!!!!!! >> I feel sorry to my pets.How about you teacher? >> CORRECT  

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