s it better for kids to have siblings?

2022-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Christina

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I think it is good to have many brothers and sisters. First of all, I believe that we can learn concession and compromise within the family, help each other, grow and form character. Like I said, I have one son and one daughter. When they were young,my son was judged to be very clever, and for that he received a lot of praise from those around him. As a result, the daughter had a sense of inferiority. After that, my daughter plays golf, and she still doesn\'t like her feelings for her brother, even though she has much more support financially. Of course, it is not easy to maintain a good relationship because the son knows that feeling. Lately, as they get older, they seem to be taking care of each other, but it\\\'s sad to think that it\\\'s all their parents\\\' fault.

강사 첨삭

Hello Charley!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think it is good to have many brothers and sisters.

>> CORRECT!
First of all, I believe that we can learn concession and compromise within the family, help each other, grow and form character.
>> First of all, I believe that we can learn concession and compromise within the family, we can help each other grow and form our character.
Like I said, I have one son and one daughter.

>> CORRECT!
When they were young,my son was judged to be very clever, and for that he received a lot of praise from those around him. 
>> When they were young, my son was judged to be very clever, and for that he received a lot of praise from those around him. 

As a result, the daughter had a sense of inferiority.

>> As a result, my daughter had a sense of inferiority.
After that, my daughter plays golf, and she still doesn\'t like her feelings for her brother, even though she has much more support financially.
>> My daughter currently plays golf but she still doesn\'t like her feelings towards her brother, even though she has much more support financially.
Of course, it is not easy to maintain a good relationship because the son knows that feeling. 

>> Of course, it is not easy to maintain a good relationship because my son knows about my daughter\'s feelings.

Lately, as they get older, they seem to be taking care of each other, but it\\\'s sad to think that it\\\'s all their parents\\\' fault.

>>  As they are growing older, they seem to be taking care of each other more, but it\'s sad to think that it\'s all their parents\' fault.

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