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학생이 쓴 원문
It is very sad news that young people\'s suicide rate is increasing for whatever reason.
I can found easily depressed children in school after covid 19.
Eating alone and playing games alone such non social activities become a daily routine for people.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]!
I agree on your point. and thank you for sharing your thought.
Children are very vulnerable with depression because they tend to find ways how to express what they feel. and if a significant person cannot provide that for them. they tend to divert somethin g else and commonly to smartphones or games.
Have a great day!
Aki~
It is very sad news that young people\'s suicide rate is increasing for whatever reason.>>> CORRECT
I can found easily depressed children in school after covid19.
I can found easily depressed children in school after covid19.
>>> I can easily find depressed children in school after covid19.
Eating alone and playing games alone such non social activities become a daily routine for people.
Eating alone and playing games alone such non social activities become a daily routine for people.
>>> CORRECT
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