Sad father

Dear [Name]. [이름],

A wonderful Thursday to us! ^.^

I was really shocked when I read the results of the survey that you shared with me through writing.

I don\'t like my future kids to be like the students you participated in that research.

However, the results can help parents know their kids\' opinions about money.

In addition, through this survey, parents may think of the reasons why some daughters and sons answered on that way.

There are many things to consider first before giving some reactions toward this issue.

I hope the results won\'t ruin your thinking regarding the youth.

That\'s all for now! ^^

Don\'t forget to check the suggestions and corrections I included in your writing.

Happy reading! ^^,

See you! ^^.

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

A professer in Seogang university reported his surveillance result that ask to his students \"What do you want most to your father? and their reply was money in 40% of all anserwed students.

>> I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IT: A professor in Seogang University reported on his surveillance result that asks to his students the question, \"What do you want the most from your father?\" and 40% of the respondents\' reply was money.

>> OR: A professor in Seogang University reported on his survey\'s result that asks to his students the question, \"What do you want the most from your father?\" and 40% of the respondents answered money.

Another surveillance result to Seoul university students that \"when do you think is the most appropriate time to your farther\'s death? and their reply was 63 years old and the reason was that their father had retired money most at that time.

>> IT IS BETTER TO SAY: Another surveillance result covering Seoul University students answering the question, \"When do you think is the most appropriate time to your father\'s death?\" and their reply was 63 years old. The reason was that their fathers would have their pension most at that time.

They thought that that time is most ideal to tmem\"

>> Thay thought that time was the most ideal to them. (BE CAREFUL WITH YOUR SPELLING.)

>> OR: They think that time was the most ideal to them.

We feel very sad to see the reult of this surveillance.

>> We feel very sad to see the results of this surveillance. (SPELLING)

>> BETTER: We feel very sad to see the results of this survey.

>> OR: We feel very sad to see the results of this study.

Why our young guys became rubber to steal thier parent\'s money whish is made by sweat and endeavor rather than making money for themselves.

>> Why our youth became robbers to steal their parents\' money which is made by sweat and endeavor rather than making money for themselves. (RUBBER should be ROBBER.)

\"Be careful your son\"

>> Be careful to you son. (It is better to remove the quotation marks.)

If these surveillance results were true, Is there no relation between being good student and filial duty?

>> If these surveillance results were true, is there no relation between being a good student and filial duty? (Check CAPITALIZATION and ARTICLES.)

So parent need to spend all money which is made by themselves before death rather than to give it to their children.

>> So, parents need to spend all of their money which is made by themselves before passing away rather than to give it ti their children. (Use punctuations marks properly.)

The book named \"Spend all the money before death\" became the best seller.

>> The book names \"Spend All the Money Before Death\" became a best seller. (ARTICLE)