Safety protocols in schools
학생이 쓴 원문
I am so sorry for the miserable death of the young child. To prevent the same accident from recurring, I think that those who have mental diseases like depression or panic disorder shouldn\'t be allowed to work at any school before they recover completely. And most important is a regular check on safety in schools.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
I agree! What happened to that child was very unfortunate. I also hope that it will never happen again, and I also hope that mental health conditions can be prevented or, if not, detected and treated early, as I have read several articles about it and how it is becoming more common nowadays.
- T. Caitlyn
I am so sorry for the miserable death of the young child.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: I feel sorry for the miserable death of the young child.
To prevent the same accident from recurring, I think that those who have mental diseases like depression or panic disorder shouldn\'t be allowed to work at any school before they recover completely.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: To prevent the same accident from recurring, I think that those who have mental health conditions like depression or panic disorder shouldn\'t be allowed to work at any school before they recover completely.
And most important is a regular check on safety in schools.
>> The most important thing is regular safety checks in schools.
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