Sales Person

2021-11-06 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

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First of all, I would call the clients concerning the new developed products. And then, I send the information of the new products to them by mail. Afterward, I call again each client to confirm if they took well understanding for the using method, quality, and efficiency of the products, etc. After passing one week, I meet them to explain it with more detailed materials..

강사 첨삭

Hi there again [이름]!

Your explanation here is very good! The way you would make a client understand your product is very systematic and sincere.

Kindly go over the explanations I made below. If you have further questions, you may ask them in class when I see you next week.

Take care and have a very happy weekend!

-T. Donna =)

First of all, I would call the clients concerning the new developed products.
>> Correct!

And then, I send the information of the new products to them by mail.
>> And then, I U send the information of the new products to them by mail.
EXPLANATION: Since you used \"would\" to express a hypothetical answer, then it must also be on this sentence to mean the same time frame.

Afterward, I call again each client to confirm if they took well understanding
for the using method, quality, and efficiency of the products, etc.
>> Afterward, I would call again each client to confirm if they had a good understanding
for the using method, quality, and efficiency of the products, etc.
EXPLANATION: The expression \"had a good understanding\" is more appropriate. Otherwise, you can also say \"well-understood\".

After passing one week, I meet them to explain it with more detailed materials..
>> After a week/ After a week passed, I would meet them to explain it with more detailed materials.
EXPLANATION: You may choose from the two suggestions of expressing time frame between \"After a week/ After a week passed...\" as these are the common ways to express after one week had gone by.

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