Sales result

2012-04-05 · 첨삭 강사 Faye

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This graph represents the number of cars Korea Motors sold to 6 different regions in 2000 and in 2001. As you can see from the graph, Korea Motors sold the largest number of cars to North America, followed by Europe in both 2001 and 2002 but they all didn't reach the targetfor 2002. However there were some significant differences in other countries. The most striking aspect is that the weakest market in 2001 was Australia but in 2002 the number of cars for 2002 was rather too high, the sales results in 2002 didn't increase as much as expeted. In addition, the number of cars sold in South America and Africa didn't change at all, remaining the lowest. Therefore, we can assume that Austrailia will likely become a big customer in the future.

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Hello Sophia, Thank you for making a composition. I really appreciate it. Hope to see more! See you on Monday! Have a nice weekend! Teacher Faye Here are your corrections: This graph represents the number of cars Korea Motors sold to 6 different regions in 2000 and in 2001. >>This graph represents the number of cars Korea Motors sold to 6 different regions since 2000 to 2001. As you can see from the graph, Korea Motors sold the largest number of cars to North America, followed by Europe in both 2001 and 2002 but they all didn\'t reach the target for 2002. >>Correct! However there were some significant differences in other countries. >>Correct! The most striking aspect is that the weakest market in 2001 was Australia but in 2002 the number of cars for 2002 was rather too high, the sales results in 2002 didn\'t increase as much as expeted. >>Correct! In addition, the number of cars sold in South America and Africa didn\'t change at all, remaining the lowest. >>In addition, the number of cars sold in South America and Africa didn\'t change at all, as a result of being the lowwest. Therefore, we can assume that Austrailia will likely become a big customer in the future. >>Correct!

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