Sand dust occurs in the upper area of Yellow River
학생이 쓴 원문
Sand dust occurs in the upper area of Yellow River in China.
It blows from China to Korea.
Sometimes it appears in Japan.
It causes many problem on our breath organ.
We can see the sand dust today in the sky.
Some people wears mask on his face.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Please be careful.. Sand dust, as you said, is harmful to your health so always wear protection when you go out..
Anyway, here are my corrections for you:
It causes many problem on our breath organ.>> It causes many problems on our breathing organ.
>> It causes many problems on our respiratory systemSome people wears mask on his face.
>> Some people wear mask on their faces.
T. Shy
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