Saturday

2010-08-02 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

학생이 쓴 원문

Saturday Today was awful. I tried to make tofu snack. I searched recipe in Internet. First, To squeeze tofu. Second, Mix tofu, egg, sugar and flour. Third, Roll dough and cut the dough. Last, Fry or roast the dough. I followed the recipe, but I failed. It was just dough, not snack. It tasted flour. I tried to make several times, However, I still failed. Besides kitchen was in a mess. Oh, I am writing diary at 3 : 20 A.M. To write something to eat, I become hungry. but I shouldn't eat something. It's too late. If I eat something, I will be fatter. To go to the bed is better than feeling hungry. In addition I feel sleepy. I will write sunday's diary tomorrow.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],

I feel sorry that you haven’t made your snack successfully but try it again next time. Practice makes perfect, right?

Great job in your writing part, you are doing well. Here are the corrections.

Stay safe,

Connie

Saturday
Today was awful.

>> Correct

I tried to make tofu snack.

>> Correct

 I searched recipe in Internet.

>> I searched a recipe in the internet.

First, To squeeze tofu.

>> First, it to squeeze the tofu.

Second, Mix tofu, egg, sugar and flour.

>> Second, mixed the tofu, egg, sugar and flour.

 Third, Roll dough and cut the dough.

>> Next, roll the dough and cut it.

 Last, Fry or roast the dough.

>> Lastly, fry or roast the dough.

I followed the recipe, but I failed.

>> Correct

It was just dough, not snack. It tasted flour.

>> It was just dough, not a snack, it tastes like flour.

 I tried to make several times,

>> I tried to make it for several times,

 However, I still failed.

>> Correct

Besides kitchen was in a mess.

>> Besides that my kitchen was a mess.
Oh, I am writing diary at 3: 20 A.M.

>> Correct

To write something to eat, I become hungry. but I shouldn't eat something.

>> While I’m writing, I feel hungry, but I shouldn’t eat anything.

It's too late. If I eat something, I will be fatter.

>> It’s already too late, If I eat something I will be fat.

To go to the bed is better than feeling hungry.

>> Going to bed is the best thing I can do today

In addition I feel sleepy.

>> IN addition, I feel sleepy.

 I will write sunday's diary tomorrow.

>> I will write Sunday’s diary tomorrow.

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