Saving electricity is very important.
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Saving electricity is very important. These days, electricity became vital energy. We can\'t use computer, phone, or lantern. These things are vital things to our lives. We can\'t study in night, and lots of jobs which use computer will disappear. Like this, electricity became vital energy to our lives. Then, we have to save this energy to use it after century. So, we should learn how to save electricity such as unplugging, or turn off lights. It can save lots of energy.
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Saving electricity is very important.
>> This is a good sentence.
These days, electricity became vital energy.
>> These days, electricity is becoming vital energy.
We can\'t use computer, phone, or lantern.
>> We can\'t use computers, phones, or lanterns without it.
These things are vital things to our lives.
>> These things are vital for our lives.
We can\'t study in night, and lots of jobs which use computer will disappear.
>> We can\'t study at night, and lots of jobs which use computers will disappear without electricity.
Like this, electricity became vital energy to our lives.
>> Hence, it is vital.
Then, we have to save this energy to use it after century.
>> We have to save energy so that we can still use it after a century,
So, we should learn how to save electricity such as unplugging, or turn off lights.
>> We should learn how to save electricity by unplugging appliances or turning off lights.
It can save lots of energy.
>> This is a good sentence.
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