Say something about a devastating situation that you have encountered in a maximum of 5 sentences.

2015-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Carmen

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The most devastating situation I have encountered was a traffic accident. I happened a traffic accident at the time of the third year of high school. I was very upset because it was a very importance period of preparing university entrance examination after 3 months. While in the hospital, I made effort to study hard. Although remained only 3 months, with the help of teacher and family, I didn’t give up study, even decided to think positively. After a few months, I passed the exam and entered the university finally. Through this experience, I learned the importance of family again.

강사 첨삭

An awesome day to you, [이름]! Thank you for always being active in our class! You always inspire me to be happy and enthusiastic. I also look forward to hearing your stories so I encourage you to write and speak more in English. I can really feel that you are a great person inside and out. So continue striving for more in your life because I know that you will succeed in whatever you do just as long as you put your mind into it! :) See you later! :*   With love, Teacher Carmen <3   The most devastating situation I have encountered was a traffic accident. >> CORRECT! OR>> The most devastating situation that I have encountered was a traffic accident. I happened a traffic accident at the time of the third year of high school. >> The traffic accident happened when I was in third year high school. I was very upset because it was a very importance period of preparing university entrance examination after 3 months. >> I was very upset because it was a very important period where in I was preparing  for a university entrance examination in 3 months.   While in the hospital, I made effort to study hard. >> CORRECT! OR>> I made an effort to study hard while I was in the hospital.   Although remained only 3 months, with the help of teacher and family, I didn’t give up study, even decided to think positively. >> Although I just remained in the hospital for 3 months, I didn\'t give up studying with the help of my teacher and my family. I even decided to think positively about what happened. After a few months, I passed the exam and entered the university finally. >>After a few months, I finally passed the exam and entered the university.   Through this experience, I learned the importance of family again. >> Through this experience, I learned the importance of my family again.

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