Say something about how you would spend a million dollars in a maximum of 5 sentences.

2015-10-13 · 첨삭 강사 Carmen

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If I have a million dollars to spend, I'm very happy even just thinking. I have many things want to do. First of all, I want to buy an apartment. In my opinion, it is difficult to buy a house as an ordinary company employee, even work more than 10 years. So, buy a house is the first important thing I need to do. In addition, I would like to establish schools and house if I have enough money. In order to develop society, it is important to develop education of children and medical facilities. So that many people can be benefited welfare for free.

강사 첨삭

Good Evening, [이름]! How was your weekend? I hope that you are doing just fine. I loved how you answered your homework. It is very wise and kind of you to be thinking that way. I would have done the same if I get that huge amount of money. :) Great job for today!! However, be mindful of the corrections, okay? I am here to correct and help you so that you can be a great English communicator someday! Good luck and see you later! I miss you! :)   Teacher Carmen ^^   If I have a million dollars to spend, I\'m very happy even just thinking. >> I would be very happy just thinking about having a million dollars to spend.   I have many things want to do. >> I have a lot of things that I wanted to do. First of all, I want to buy an apartment. >> Correct!   In my opinion, it is difficult to buy a house as an ordinary company employee, even work more than 10 years. >> In my opinion, it is difficult for you to buy a house if you are just an ordinary employee who is even working for more than 10 years.   So, buy a house is the first important thing I need to do. >> So buying a house is the first thing that I need to do. In addition, I would like to establish schools and house if I have enough money. >> In addition, I would like to establish schools and houses if I have enough money.   In order to develop society, it is important to develop education of children and medical facilities. >> In order to develop the society, it is important to improve the quality of education that is given to the children and the medical facilities for the people.   So that many people can be benefited welfare for free. >> So that there will be many people who can benefit from it for free.

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