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2022-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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A kind of phenomena is decrease the population in many countries. A case of South Korea, the problem is that the change in population decline is too rapid. In addition, it is one of a thorny task of the government to gap seriously among provinces with population dense, the cost of house, medical facilities and the chance to get a job. It is good rather that the school is closed down. Some school keep the empty due to opposing of resident.

강사 첨삭

Good day Ms. [이름]! I just feel unhappy about this because in my country, some areas cannot provide a big school for the students. Thank you for sharing your thought.

Aki~

A kind of phenomena is decrease the population in many countries.

>>> A kind of phenomenon like the decrease of population is happening in many countries
A case of South Korea, the problem is that the change in population decline is too rapid.
>>> In the case of South Korea, the problem is that the change or decline in population is too rapid.
In addition, it is one of a thorny task of the government to gap seriously among provinces with population dense, the cost of house, medical facilities and the chance to get a job.

>>> In addition, It is onr of the thorny tasks of the government that there is a serious gap among the provinces in population, cost of housse, medical facilities and the chance to get a job.
It is good rather that the school is closed down.
>>> It is good rather than closing the school down.

Some school keep the empty due to opposing of resident

>>> Some schools remain empty because of the opposition of some residents

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