School debate

2023-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Lyn

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The school debate was about do south and northkorea should be one. I thinked that south and north korea should not be one however, because there is no balance on the team, I went to agree team. After our team and also me speaked our argument, other team did however there was a troll. Because of that troll, the other team lose there time to speak and because our team did a great job, we win the debate.

강사 첨삭

Good day, Jude! It is a very complex topic, but it\'s an interesting topic for discussion. Your thoughts and opinions on this topic are important. I happy to hear that your team won the debate. Have a wonderful day. Enjoy your Christmas holidays with your family!~T. Lyn
The school debate was about do south and northkorea should be one. 
>>The school debate was about, \"Should South Korea and North Korea be united?\"
I thinked that south and north korea should not be one however, because there is no balance on the team, I went to agree team. 
>>I thought it would not be possible if North Korea and South Korea became one, as it would create imbalance, so I went with the opposition team.
After our team and also me speaked our argument, other team did however there was a troll. 
>>After my team and I stated our arguments, the other team spoke, but there was a troll.
Because of that troll, the other team lose there time to speak and because our team did a great job, we win the debate.
>>Due to the troll, the other team loses time to speak, and because our team did a great job, we won the debate.

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