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Ebola virus first discovered in 1976. And discovered in Zaire(now The Democratic Republic of Congo). Ebola virus was distinguished by shape from previously known viruses. The Ebola virus was named after a river near the village where it first appeared. Promo to the most recent outbreak, almost all previous Ebola outbreaks had occurred in Central Africa. The Ebola virus reservoir is currently assumed to fruit bats. According to Palul Farmer, the main focus of the Ebola outbreak efforts were directed at containment. Ebola is referred to as the caregiver’s disease. According to Allan Brandt, the possible effects of various disease, including Ebola, has been discussed in the past and therefore should not have surprised the global community.In this chapter, HIV led to the global development of better blood safety procedures.
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Ebola virus first discovered in 1976. And discovered in Zaire(now The Democratic Republic of Congo).
>> Ebola virus was first discovered in 1976 in Zaire which is now known as The Democratic Republic of Congo.
Ebola virus was distinguished by shape from previously known viruses.
>> It was distinguished by shape from previously known viruses. (We can use pronouns instead of using the same subject repeatedly)
The Ebola virus was named after a river near the village where it first appeared.
>> correct
Promo to the most recent outbreak, almost all previous Ebola outbreaks had occurred in Central Africa.
>> Compared to the most recent outbreak, almost all previous Ebola outbreaks had occurred in Central Africa.
The Ebola virus reservoir is currently assumed to fruit bats.
>> The Ebola reservoir is currently assumed as home to fruit bats.
According to Palul Farmer, the main focus of the Ebola outbreak efforts were directed at containment.
>> correct
Ebola is referred to as the caregiver’s disease. According to Allan Brandt, the possible effects of various diseases, including Ebola, has been discussed in the past and therefore should not have surprised the global community.
>> correct (we just say have been discussed instead of has been discussed because the subject is effects-plural)
In this chapter, HIV led to the global development of better blood safety procedures.
>> In this period/era, the discovery of HIV has led to the global development of better blood safety procedures.
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