School homework

2017-09-11 · 첨삭 강사 Jacey

학생이 쓴 원문

I will introduce to you about my favorite painting. My favorite painting is Pablo Picasso's Maya with doll. In the picture, I see his daughter Maya. Maya is Pablo Picasso's daughter. And he drew his daughter. She has green hair ,and Maya wore colorful clothes. I also see Maya's doll. It wore a purple clothes,and green cap. Maya's doll is laying on her knees. This painting is showing main charactor Maya's face front and side. But it is very interesting that the doll that Maya holds is looking forward to the front. Not only the face but also the legs shape are different. One leg is normal, but the other is when we stand there. When I look at the picture,I felt strange. Because the Maya in this painting is having a poker face. And I was wondering why he didn't draw Maya's happy face. So far, I introduced my favorite painting .

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! ^^,

Thanks for sharing your favorite painting with me.

I will try to look at it later and let\'s try to talk about it in class.

Have a wonderful Monday afternoon.


Happily,

Teacher Jacey


I will introduce to you about my favorite painting.

>> Correct!

>> OR : I will introduce to you my favorite painting.


My favorite painting is Pablo Picasso\'s Maya with doll.
>> My favorite painting is Pablo Picasso\'s \"Maya with Doll.\"


In the picture, I see his daughter Maya.

>> Correct!


Maya is Pablo Picasso\'s daughter.
>> Correct! 


And he drew his daughter. 

>> Correct!


She has green hair ,and Maya wore colorful clothes.
 
>> She has green hair and colorful clothes.


I also see Maya\'s doll. 

>> Correct! 
It wore a purple clothes,and green cap.
>> It wore purple clothes and a green cap.

 

Maya\'s doll is laying on her knees.
>> Correct!  


This painting is showing main charactor Maya\'s face front and side.
>> This painting is showing the main character, Maya facing front and side.

 

But it is very interesting that the doll that Maya holds is looking forward to the front.
>> But it is very interesting that the doll Maya is holding is facing front.


Not only the face but also the legs shape are different.

>> Not only the face, but the legs are also shaped differently.


One leg is normal, but the other is when we stand there.
>> One leg is normal but the other is not. 


When I look at the picture,I felt strange. 

>> When I look at the picture, I feel strange.


Because the Maya in this painting is having a poker face.
>> Because Maya\'s face shows no emotions.


And I was wondering why he didn\'t draw Maya\'s happy face. 

>> I was also wondering why he didn\'t draw Maya happy.


So far, I introduced my favorite painting .

>> Correct!  

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