school performance evaluation
학생이 쓴 원문
I often spend my free time coding games because I like making fun stories and experiences. Game coding lets me put my love for stories together with my interest in computers. It also gives me a chance to try new things, learn more, and use my imagination.
p.s. i want more friendly write:) because this is my presentation for school performance evaluation thank you for we will play on wednesday and friday
강사 첨삭
Hi Justin!
These sentences are really natural and they are grammatically correct.
You should run with these expressions.
I hope you get a good score on your evaluation.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I often spend my free time coding games because I like making fun stories and experiences.
>> Correct
Game coding lets me put my love for stories together with my interest in computers.
>> Correct
It also gives me a chance to try new things, learn more, and use my imagination.
>> Correct
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