School violence.

2011-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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There has always been school violence in any school. Children aren't grown up. One who is strong tends to bully weak one. I myself don't know how to deal with this problem. because school life is similar to the nature in Africa. Lion attacks cow. We can't stop that. I have witnessed serious violence in my school period. There was often violence because of many reasons. Sometimes no reason. In elementary school, I was involved in violence as an attacker. Since I was young, I didn't felt guilty when I bullied someone. There was a guy in our class . He was so kind and a little silly. So I and my friends began to bully him. Now I really regret what I did. and I wanna give him my sincere apology.

강사 첨삭

My dear [이름], Thank you so much for dropping in your composition. I do appreciate telling me your story about this my dear and Im so proud that you did the right thing in asking for an apology. Kids and teenagers sometimes have what we call peer influence, and I guess this is what you've experienced when you were an elementary student, and now that you regret it, we do learn most of the time because of our mistakes. Talk to you later my dear..:) -Teacher Cam-   There has always been school violence in any school. >>correct! >>There has always been violence present in any school. Children aren't grown up. >>correct! One who is strong tends to bully weak one. >correct! I myself don't know how to deal with this problem. >>correct! because school life is similar to the nature in Africa. >>correct! Lion attacks cow. We can't stop that. >>correct! I have witnessed serious violence in my school period. >>correct! There was often violence because of many reasons. >>correct! >>Violence often occur because of many reasons. Sometimes no reason. >>correct! >>Sometimes no reason at all. In elementary school, I was involved in violence as an attacker. >>In elementary school, I was involved in a violence as an attacker. >>When I was an elementary student I even attacked some students before. Since I was young, I didn't felt guilty when I bullied someone. >>Since I was young I didnt feel guilty whenever I bully someone. There was a guy in our class . He was so kind and a little silly. >>correct! So I and my friends began to bully him. >>correct! Now I really regret what I did. >>correct! and I wanna give him my sincere apology. >>and I wanna ask him for my sincerest apology.

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