script 4
학생이 쓴 원문
Students may be affected more than adults, and they will not choose well, but choose president only by candidate’s party. Last semester, I took a politics class, and the teacher of that always said about a particular party, so students can be easily brainwashed who don’t know much about politic situations. Therefore, they will become like the party following their parents or teachers. It doesn’t mean ‘the right for voting’, but ‘just for increasing the number of voting people’. Besides, students also think that someone who appears a lot on TV is friendlier rather than other candidates. Mass media can be very large factor for students at election. Voting has meaning when they choose one by their own decision. It is meaningless if voting is influenced by other things.
강사 첨삭
Students may be affected more than adults, and they will not choose well, but choose president only by candidate’s party.
>>Students can be influenced easily as compared to adults, and they will not choose well, and will have the tendency to choose a president according to the candidate’s party
Last semester, I took a politics class, and the teacher of that always said about a particular party,
>> Last semester, I took up politics class, and the teacher always talked about a particular party
so students can be easily brainwashed who don’t know much about politic situations.
>>so students who don’t know much about politics can be easily brainwashed
Therefore, they will become like the party following their parents or teachers.
>> Therefore, they become likely to choose the party according to their parents and teachers judgement
It doesn’t mean ‘the right for voting’, but ‘just for increasing the number of voting people’.
>>correct
Besides, students also think that someone who appears a lot on TV is friendlier rather than other candidates.
>>correct
Mass media can be very large factor for students at election.
>>Mass media can be a very big factor to influence students during election
Voting has meaning when they choose one by their own decision.
>>Voting will only have a meaning if they will choose a candidate in their own will
It is meaningless if voting is influenced by other things.
>>correct
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