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Finally, high school students can have more chance after they are twenty. It just 3 years that high school students wait. During 3 years, students will be mature because they think about politics more than they did.
Therefore High school students are too young to vote. They should get suffrage after they learn and think enough. high school students should not be able to vote.
강사 첨삭
Finally, high school students can have more chance after they are twenty.
>>Finally, high school students are given more chances after they reach the age of twenty
It just 3 years that high school students wait.
>>High school students should wait for three more years
During 3 years, students will be mature because they think about politics more than they did.>>During this 3 years, students will become mature enough because they will be more involved with politics than before.
Therefore High school students are too young to vote.
>>correct
They should get suffrage after they learn and think enough.
>>they should have enough “training” so they will become wiser
high school students should not be able to vote.
>>correct
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