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2.reason for changing jobs(previous company)
Because I lacked my major ability as a double major I got a job where it was easy to get a job for fast social experience and financial independence.
While studying to obtain license of engineer electricity, I thought I could not have the same dream with a company.
In the end, I decided to leave
3.reason for application
from my school days, I have challenged the difficult path by looking at the value of the hard thing without complacency. I challenged CSAT(College Scholastic Ability Test) one more time and double major as well as software development. Through challeges, I have achieved my goal and been recognized for my contribution to the team.
Working in different fields and companies, I found out what I really wanted.
I want to contribute in the development of the company by cultivating my job expertise and making know-how
So, I do not complacency present company and challenge ThyssenKrupp Elevator Korea
강사 첨삭
Hello Jason!
Because I lacked my major ability as a double major I got a job where it was easy to get a job for fast social experience and financial independence.
While studying to obtain license of engineer electricity, I thought I could not have the same dream with a company.
In the end, I decided to leave.
from my school days, I have challenged the difficult path by looking at the value of the hard thing without complacency.
I want to contribute in the development of the company by cultivating my job expertise and making know-how
So, I do not complacency present company and challenge ThyssenKrupp Elevator Korea
Thank you for sending me your script.
I will check it and I hope it will help you ace that interview~
2.reason for changing jobs(previous company)
>>Reason for changing careers
Because I lacked my major ability as a double major I got a job where it was easy to get a job for fast social experience and financial independence.
>>Since I lacked in the
While studying to obtain license of engineer electricity, I thought I could not have the same dream with a company.
>>While studying, I obtained a license in Electrical Engineering and I thought that I could not achieve the goal in the company.
In the end, I decided to leave.
>>CORRECT
3.reason for application
>> Reason for Applying
from my school days, I have challenged the difficult path by looking at the value of the hard thing without complacency.
>>Since I was young, I was challenged by different people and learned the value of accomplishing difficult things without being complacent.
I challenged CSAT(College Scholastic Ability Test) one more time and double major as well as software development.
>>I was challenged to take the CSAT (College Scholastic Ability Test) once more and I took a double major as well as software development.
Through challeges, I have achieved my goal and been recognized for my contribution to the team.
>> Through these challenges, I have achieved my goals and has been recognized for my contribution to my team.
Working in different fields and companies, I found out what I really wanted.
>> After working in different fields and companies, I found what I really wanted in life.
I want to contribute in the development of the company by cultivating my job expertise and making know-how
>>I want to contribute in the development of the company by cultivating my job expertise and sharing my talents and skills in the company with the wisdom I have acquired.
So, I do not complacency present company and challenge ThyssenKrupp Elevator Korea
>> So, I am not complacent with my present company and I think that I am more inspired to work with ThyssenKrupp Elevator Korea.
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