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Modern Japanese Buddhism was nationalistic and pursued the productivity of capital as enacted by the enlightenment.
>>CORRECT!
But Buddhism of Chosun critically examined the Western modern civilization and laid the foundations for the succession of the Chosun’ spirituality and liberation freedoms of the nation through the development of Buddhist spiritual civilization.
>>But Buddhism of Chosun critically examined the Western modern civilization and laid the foundations for the succession of the Chosun’s spirituality and liberation freedoms of the nation through the development of Buddhist spiritual civilization.
Manhae reflected on the Buddhist tradition, while at the same time dealing with Western modernity and modernization, and reinterpreted modern discourse based on Buddhist thought.
>>Manhae reflected on the Buddhist tradition, at the same time dealt with Western modernity and modernization, and reinterpreted modern discourse based on Buddhist thought.
The freedom of Manhae(萬海) was a free and equality that comes from the enlightenment.
>>The freedom of Manhae(萬海) was equality that comes from the enlightenment.
Also It was human liberation and social liberation.
>>It was also human and social liberation.
The social evolution that Manhae speaks is not same the evolution of Spenser.
>>The social evolution that Manhae speaks about is not same the evolution of Spenser.
He opposed the social evolution theory of the survival of the fittest, and he saw that excellent and winner is not the one who invades the weak, but the loving of all things, and the true power is in the power of liberation.
>> He opposed the social evolution theory of the survival of the fittest, and he saw that the excellent and the winner are not the ones who invade the weak, but love all things, and the true power is in the power of liberation.
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