Second compostion (3/3); Comparing two items

2012-11-30 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Lastly, I’ll speak about their price. Yes, the price is most important. The price of the LED lamp like the those type (pointing the ceiling) is more than 50,000 won whereas the price of the fluorescent lamp is just about 2,000 won! The fluorescent lamp is even 25 times cheaper than the LED lamp! In a nut shell, LED lamps are five times and six times better than fluorescent lamps in electric consumption and lifespan respectively while fluorescent lamps are 25 times cheaper than LED lamps. So I would strongly advise you to buy LED lamps only if you can use them for more than 30 years or the price of LED lamps will be much cheaper than now. I expect the price of LED lamps is going to be cheap in 3 years because they are in developing and producing step. I hope it helps you for your electric bill and saving money in the future. Thank you for listening. Reference My experience and web site(~~) -end- (P.S. Is it an useful information to you? I hope so XD)

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Hello! Your essay is very interesting. I feel glad because of the informations that you\'ve shared. Thank you for your concern. See you in class!

-Teacher Chloe.

Lastly, I’ll speak about their price.

>> Correct.

>> OR: Lastly, I\'ll talk about their price.

Yes, the price is most important.

>> Yes, the price is the most important.

The price of the LED lamp like the those type (pointing the ceiling) is more than 50,000 won whereas the price of the fluorescent lamp is just about 2,000 won!

>>  The price of the LED lamp like the that (pointing the ceiling) is more than 50,000 won whereas the price of the fluorescent lamp is just about 2,000 won!

The fluorescent lamp is even 25 times cheaper than the LED lamp!

>> Correct.

In a nut shell, LED lamps are five times and six times better than fluorescent lamps in electric consumption and lifespan respectively while fluorescent lamps are 25 times cheaper than LED lamps.

>> In a nut shell, LED lamps are five or six times better than fluorescent lamps when it comes to electric consumption and lifespan respectively, while fluorescent lamps are 25 times cheaper than LED lamps.  

So I would strongly advise you to buy LED lamps only if you can use them for more than 30 years or the price of LED lamps will be much cheaper than now.

>>  So I would strongly advise you to buy LED lamps because you can use them for more than 30 years and the price of LED lamps will be much cheaper in the years to come.

I expect the price of LED lamps is going to be cheap in 3 years because they are in developing and producing step.

>> I expect the price of LED lamp to go down in three years because they are continuously developing and improving. 

I hope it helps you for your electric bill and saving money in the future.

>> I hope that this essay will help you to save money from your electric bill.

Thank you for listening.

>> Correct. Reference

My experience and web site(~~) -end-

>> Correct.

(P.S. Is it an useful information to you? I hope so XD)

P.S. Is it a useful information to you? I hope so.

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