Second compostion; Comparing two items
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Good afternoon! Thank you for today\'s composition. Have a great day!
-Teacher Chloe.
Hi. Chloe. It\'s um..second composition..bothering you XP. I\'m sorry lol.
>> Hi Chloe! This is my second composition. I\'m sorry to bother you.
Fluorescent Lamps vs L.E.D Lamps
>> Correct
Hello everyone. I’m going to talk about two types of lamps; Fluorescent lamps and LED lamps.
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Hello everyone. I\'m going to talk about the two types of lamps- Fluorescent lamps and LED lamps
Fluorescent lamps are universally used in various places such as offices, buildings and schools like here (pointing the ceiling).
>> Correct
Otherwise, L.E.D lamps are known well as very efficient lighting and easily can be found in luxury products such as televisions, monitors and even smartphones.
>> LED lamps are known for it\'s efficient lighting and it can be found easily among luxurious products such as televisions, monitors and even smart phones.
The reason why I prepared those products is that I’m working at the electricity company.
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The reason why I prepared those products is that I\'m working at an electric company.
And these days, because of the high electric bill, most people want to save the money in that field through changing low efficient electric product to high.
>> And these days, because of the high electric bill, most people want to save money by changing from low efficient electric products to high
efficient electric products
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However, even if LED lamps are more efficient than Fluorescent lamps, we still use more fluorescent lamps than LED lamps.
>> Correct
Why does it happen? Let me tell you about this, comparing the two types of lamps about their electric consumption, lifespan and price.
>> Correct
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