second letter

2011-05-14 · 첨삭 강사 Joanna

학생이 쓴 원문

i had a very important presentation today. everyone who participated in seminar said that our team will win. but our team didn't get a first prize. and we get a third prize. so i felt disappointed. and the atfernoon, i checked the toeic grade. i got a bad grade.:( actually, i really want to go to bed now, but i can't do that.. i will listen to english radio:) next time, i will get a high grade of toeic. see ya!

강사 첨삭

Hi!

You did a good job in writing this composition. I noticed a few mistakes particularly regarding your capitalization and punctuation marks. Have a nice day!

T. Joanna

 

i had a very important presentation today.
>> I had a very important presentation today.
everyone who participated in seminar said that our team will win.

>> Everyone who participated in the seminar said that our team will win.
but our team didn't get a first prize.

>> But our team didn't get the first prize.
and we get a third prize.

>> And we got the third prize.
so i felt disappointed.

>> So, i felt disappointed.
and the atfernoon, i checked the toeic grade.

>> And in the atfernoon, i checked the toeic grade.
i got a bad grade.:(

>> I got a bad grade.:(
actually, i really want to go to bed now, but i can't do that..

>> Actually, I really want to go to bed now, but I can't do that.
i will listen to english radio:)

>> I will listen to english radio:)
next time, i will get a high grade of toeic.

>> Next time, I will get a high grade in toeic.
see ya!

>>See you!

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