Secret place
학생이 쓴 원문
I spending busy at thease day.
Because i start to work and study and take care my body.
It is not enough time to do everyfhing.
I want to take some more rest time for health.
And i need more sleep at a day.
But it is very interesting.
Actully nevertheless I spend a busy day, I have some enjoy time for buried in meditation.
That is.....
When i get some new job and have some new company.
I always find some place for take a rest time.
Now i have a lovely space for really good time myself.
There is a bench under the tree in front of mountion the brink of ground.
I can small some perfume of pine tree and i can feel some wind like cotton candy.
And i can see the blue sky in there.
강사 첨삭
Wow! I think that's such a peaceful place. Nice. And also with regards to being busy all the time, finding BALANCE is the key there, my dear.
I spending busy at thease day.
>>I've been busy these days.Because i start to work and study and take care my body.
>>Because I started working, studying, and taking care of my body.It is not enough time to do everyfhing.
>>There isn't enough time to do everything.I want to take some more rest time for health.
>>CORRECT
>>I want to take some more rest for my health. -->>BETTERAnd i need more sleep at a day.
>>And I need more sleep in one day.But it is very interesting.
>>CORRECTActully nevertheless I spend a busy day, I have some enjoy time for buried in meditation.
>>Actually, even though I have a busy day, I enjoy some of my time engrossed/immersed/absorbed in meditation.That is.....When i get some new job and have some new company.
>>That is when I get a new job and enter a new company.I always find some place for take a rest time.
>>I always find some place to take a rest.
>>I always find some place to take some time to rest.Now i have a lovely space for really good time myself.
>>Now, I have a lovely space to have a really good time for myself.There is a bench under the tree in front of mountion the brink of ground.
>>There is a bench under a tree in front of a mountain which is on the brink of the ground.I can small some perfume of pine tree and i can feel some wind like cotton candy.
>>I can smell the scent of pine tress and I can feel some wind like cotton candy.And i can see the blue sky in there.
>>And I can see the clue sky from there.
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