selection my way1
학생이 쓴 원문
My former job was a banker. i didn't want to be a banker. I quited the job because I wanted to leran English at English speaking country and I wanted to experience another different culture. I dreamed it since i was a elementary student. sadly I had some problem so I couldn't do it.
After quit the job, I've hired as a secretary at this company. I like this job. it's aptitude for my personality. I have many chances to meet foreigners and time for study English. but my job have some defect.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Thanks for this composition... I also had a different dream when I was young. I wanted to be a doctor. Then, lots of problems and things came. I ended up being a teacher but I don't have any regrets. I learned a lot from being a teacher myself. It made me a better person with a very broad horizon.
XOXO,
Jenny
i didn't want to be a banker.
>> Correct.
I quited the job because I wanted to leran English at English speaking country and I wanted to experience another different culture.
>> I quit the job because I wanted to learn English in an English speaking country and I wanted to experience a different culture.
I dreamed it since i was a elementary student. sadly I had some problem so I couldn't do it.
>> I dreamt about it since I was an elementary student. Sadly, I had some problems so I wasn't able to fulfill it.
After quit the job, I've hired as a secretary at this company.
>> After quitting the job, I was hired as a secretary in this company.
it's aptitude for my personality.
>> It's an aptitude for my personality.
I have many chances to meet foreigners and time for study English. but my job have some defect.>> I have many chances to meet foreigners and time for studying English, but my job has some difficulties as well.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.