selection my way3
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First way is to be a post officer. On july, there is a exam for post officer. In Korea, Post officer is a public service personnel. so the job ensure stability. I think that I would work after marriage and I could work until 60 years old. but since the task is similiar with a banker, i am not sure i could stand it without any exciting thing.
Second way is prepare for CPS. It is a international secretary license. when I got the license, it will be easy to seperate my position which offer to me better condition.(it include rising my salary.) For the license, I have to use English fluently and work here until next january. but It has some risk. After marraige, I wouldn't to do it.
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First way is to be a post officer.
>>The first option is to be a post officer.
On july, there is a exam for post officer.
>>On July, there will be an exam for those who want to be post officers.
In Korea, Post officer is a public service personnel. so the job ensure stability.
>>In Korea, a Post Officer is a public service personnel. It means this job ensures stability of tenure.
I think that I would work after marriage and I could work until 60 years old.
>>I think that I would work after marrying and would until I’m 60 years old.
but since the task is similiar with a banker, i am not sure i could stand it without any exciting thing.
>>Since the task is similar of that of a banker and nothing exciting happens, I am not sure if I could stand it for long.Second way is prepare for CPS.
>>My second choice is to prepare for CPS.
It is a international secretary license.
>>It is an international secretarial license.
when I got the license, it will be easy to seperate my position which offer to me better condition.(it include rising my salary.)
>>If I have this license, it would be easier for me to get a better offer and higher salary.
For the license, I have to use English fluently and work here until next january.
>>In order for me to get the license, I should be fluent in English and I have to work here until January.
but It has some risk.
>>But, it has some risks as well.
After marraige, I wouldn't to do it.
>> After getting married, I wouldn’t do it anymore.
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