self-employed
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These days, people prefer to work as an owner than as a worker for companies because of many reasons.
>> Correct
This is
because the reason why we can see many shops have appeared around us nowadays.
>> This is why we can see many shops appearing around us nowadays.
This essay will explain the cases
which self-employed works are and what the drawbacks of being self-employed are.
>> This essay will explain the cases where self-employment works and the drawbacks of being self-employed.
There are many cases about people hire themselves as a worker such as a restaurant owner, a construction designer
and a music or animation composer.
>> There are many cases about people becoming restaurant owners, construction designers and music or animation composers.
These kinds of work do not need to start with many people.
>> Correct
For instance, the
owner of a small sized restaurant can manage both cooking and serving at the same time.
>> Correct
Moreover, there is no
direction or instruction from anyone.
>> Moreover, there is no one giving directions or instructions.
They can do what they want in working places.
>> They can do what they want in the workplace.
I think this is the best reason
why people work as a self-employed worker.
>> I think this is the best reason why people become self-employed.
However, we need to think about the negative effect of being self-employed.
>> However, we need to think about the negative effects of being self-employed.
Firstly, the responsibility follows always.
>> Firstly, responsibility always follows.
The meaning of being an owner is that he/she has responsibility of the re[이름]ts such as income or any issues in working
places.
>> The meaning of being an owner is that he/she has responsibility for the re[이름]ts such as income or any issues in the workplace.
It sometimes gives pressure to an owner because there is possibility of no income and illegal problems.
>> It sometimes gives pressure to an owner because there is possibility of no income and legal problems.
Secondly, self-employed owner can feel lonely.
>> Secondly, self-employed owners can feel lonely.
I think people get energy when they work with co-workers because
human is social animal.
>> I think people get energy when they work with co-workers because humans are social animals.
However, working alone means there is no one to help an owner in working place.
>> However, working alone means there is no one to help an owner in the workplace.
It makes
people to be isolation or feel depression.
>> It makes people feel isolated or depressed.
There are both freedom but loneliness.
>> There may be both freedom and loneliness.
In conclusion, everything has double-edged sword.
>> In conclusion, everything is a double-edged sword.
In this case of self-employed, there is the double-edged sword
which is freedom and responsibility.
>> In this case of self-employed, the two edges refer to freedom and responsibility.
I think the reason why people want to choose to be self-employed is people more
prefer to be free than working for others.
>> I think the reason why people want to be self-employed is they prefer to be free more than working for others.
However, we should remember there is always responsibility what we choose.
>> However, we should remember there is always responsibility in what we choose.
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