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2020-12-14 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I grew up in korea and 27 years old. I majored in interior architecture and multimedia design. I have over eight months of hands-on experience in company by designer in Seoul. I took charge of web design & publishing, promotion design and managing brand website. The main reason why i apply this job position, UX UI design is that i can be good at and i want to do. I think UX UI design is similar with space design in terms of observing user\'s behavior or pattern and human\'s flow. My merit is to make graphic effectively considering comfort of users. I think this position which i apply is to make graphic easy to use and see. I could get basic knowledge and improve skills like photoshop and illustrator through college. In 2019, I got trained professional curriculum. After training I entered in company and worked on a project and then, became to have business skill. Also. I communicated with lots of department. I want to grow more better in this field. All of this will be asset.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you for this.
- T. Beth
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I grew up in korea and 27 years old. 
>>> I grew up in Korea and I\'m currently 27 years old.   
I majored in interior architecture and multimedia design. 
>>> correct  
I have over eight months of hands-on experience in company by designer in Seoul. 
>>>  I have over eight months of hands-on experience in company as a designer in Seoul. 
I took charge of web design & publishing, promotion design and managing brand website.
>>>  correct
The main reason why i apply this job position, UX UI design is that i can be good at and i want to do. 
>>>  The main reason why I am applying for this job position for UX UI design is that I can be good at it and it\'s what I want to do. 
I think UX UI design is similar with space design in terms of observing user\'s behavior or pattern and human\'s flow. 
>>> correct 
My merit is to make graphic effectively considering comfort of users. 
>>> correct 
I think this position which i apply is to make graphic easy to use and see.
>>> I think this position which I am applying for is to make graphic easy to use and see.  
>>> OR: I think this position which I am applying for is to make graphic user-friendly. 
I could get basic knowledge and improve skills like photoshop and illustrator through college. 
>>> I could get basic knowledge and improve skills like photoshop and illustration through college.  
In 2019, I got trained professional curriculum. 
>>>  In 2019, I got trained in a professional curriculum. 
After training I entered in company and worked on a project and then, became to have business skill. 
>>> After training I entered in a company and worked on a project then gained business skills.  
Also. I communicated with lots of department. 
>>> Also, I communicated with lots of departments.   
I want to grow more better in this field. 
>>> I want to grow much better in this field.  
All of this will be asset.
>>>  All of these will become an asset.

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