Self introduction

2021-09-14 · 첨삭 강사 Jasmin

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi. I’m glad to study with you. Thanks to read my self introduction. I’m happy to introduce myself to you. My name is [Name] [이름] ji. I’m from seoul,Korea. My major is Children’s studies. Beacuse I like to play and take time with kids. I’m an only child. But I’m not feel lonely because my cousin live near my house. And I’m an active person. So I like to go out and play with my friends. But when we first met, I was shy so I needed time to get close. My hobby is baking. I usually make cakes and cookies. My goal is to get a good score in this semester. And I meet my friends or spend time with my family in my free time. Thank you for reading it. Let’s get along well this semester.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]ji, thank you for this. Have a great day! 
Jas[이름] 


Hi. I’m glad to study with you.
>>Hi, I\'m glad to be studying with you. 
Thanks to read my self introduction.
>>Thanks for reading my self introduction. 
I’m happy to introduce myself to you.
>>I\'m happy to introduce myself to you. 
My name is [Name] [이름] ji.
>>My name is [Name] [이름] Ji. 
I’m from seoul,Korea.
>>I\'m from Seoul, Korea. 
 My major is Children’s studies.
>>My major is Child\'s studies. 
Beacuse I like to play and take time with kids.
>>Because I love to play and spend time with kids. 
I’m an only child.
>>I\'m the only child. 
But I’m not feel lonely because my cousin live near my house.
>>But I don\'t feel lonely because my cousin live near my house. 
And I’m an active person.
>>And I\'m an active person.
 So I like to go out and play with my friends.
>>So I like to go out and play with my friends. 
But when we first met, I was shy so I needed time to get close.
>>But when we first met I was shy and I needed some time to be comfortable.
 My hobby is baking.
>>My hobby is baking. 
I usually make cakes and cookies.
>>I usually bake cakes and cookies.
My goal is to get a good score in this semester.
>>My goal is to get a good grades this semester. 
And I meet my friends or spend time with my family in my free time.
>>I also spend my free time with my family and friends. 
Thank you for reading it.
>>Thank you for reading.
Let’s get along well this semester.
>>Let\'s get a long well this semester. 

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